Is this a good piece of descriptive writing

A powerpoint which works through planning, writing and checking a piece of descriptive writing

Libbys ePortfolio: My best piece of descriptive writing

Can anyone please give me an approximate grade for this piece of descriptive writing at the moment. Also, please advice me of ways in which i can further improve it. I'm aiming for a high B/A, an A* will be nice if it's possible .

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How to write the perfect piece of descriptive writing

I'm starting to get a bit fanciful now (the beverage is purely imaginative), but I'm sure you see my point. Specificity can change a bland, generic piece of descriptive writing into something far more interesting to read. It draws the reader into the world of the story and makes that world and its inhabitants far more tangible and believable.

The children were given this picture as their inspiration for a piece of descriptive writing. See below for the amazing work that was produced!

Some writing projects started with lists of descriptive words or phrases. Some journal writing started with prompts, such as, “One thing I hope to see, hear, touch, taste and/or smell in my life.” Some pieces were taken through phases of the writing process: pre-write, first draft, edit and revise, publish. Reading responses have included describing a setting or character. Our Unit of Inquiry lent itself to describing extreme climates. Please enjoy a piece of descriptive writing here.

The children were given this picture as their inspiration for a piece of descriptive writing. See below for the amazing work that was produced!